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khoobsurat |
Group: Members Joined: 06th Jul, 2007 Topic: 32 Post: 326 Age:
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| Posted on:8th Aug 2007, 9:56am |
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 Urdu Poetry: Mujhe Tum Se Mohabbat Hai !!!
Tumhe Zid hai ke mai keh doon, mujhe zid hai ke tum keh do, " Mujhe Tum Se Mohabbat Hai" Kaho, mujh se mohabbat hai....... Nahi yeh jaante dono, Mohabbat kab mohtaaj hai, lafzon ki, baaton ki, Mohabbat to hamari dharkanon ke saaz mai shamil, sureeley geet ki manind, Mohabbat yaad ki dewi, Jo tanha raat ko aksar, Aati hai aankhon mai, Mohabbat soch ki gehraiyon se phoot'ti khushboo, hamesha saath rehti hai, magar phir bhi, naa jane kiyu, Tumhe Zid hai ke mai keh doon, mujhe zid hai ke tum keh do, " Mujhe Tum Se Mohabbat Hai" Kaho, mujh se mohabbat hai.......
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Mrs Ahmed |
Group: Members Joined: 22nd Jul, 2007 Topic: 2 Post: 25 Age:
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| Posted on:8th Aug 2007, 4:28pm |
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 suno tum lout aao naa
suno tum lout aao naa
k soraj dhal gaya hay
Or haseen ik sham utri hay
wo daikho chand nikla hay
sitare jagmagaey hain
hamari muntazir aankhain
dwaaein mangti aankhain
tumhee he dhondhti ankhain
tumain wapis bulaati hain
tumhara aks phir shayad
meri palkoon main utra hay
koi ansu agar aaye
baha k ab na ley jaaey
yeh dill jab bhi dharkta hay
tumahara naam leta hay
yeh ansu jab bhi behtay hain
tumari yaad main behtay hain
k barish jab bhi hoti hay
tumain he yaad karti hay
suno tum lout aao naa.....
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Ugly-Sana |
Group: Members Joined: 02nd Aug, 2007 Topic: 7 Post: 539 Age:
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| Posted on:8th Aug 2007, 4:35pm |
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 APney Hathoon Se!
Apney Hathoon se yun Chehrey ko chupatey kyon ho?
Mujh se sharmatey ho to samney atey kyon ho?
Tum bhi meri tarah kar bhi lo iqraar -e- wafa
Pyar kartey ho to phir chhupatey kyon ho?
Ashq ankhoon mein meri dekh kar rotey kyon ho?
Dil bhar ata hai to phir dil dukhatey kyon ho?
In se wabista hai jub mera muqaddar phir tum
Merey shanoon se yeh zulf uthatey kyon ho?
Roz Mar Mar ke mujhey jeeney ko kehtey kyon ho?
Milney atey ho to phir Laut jatey kyon ho? |
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Ugly-Sana |
Group: Members Joined: 02nd Aug, 2007 Topic: 7 Post: 539 Age:
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| Posted on:8th Aug 2007, 4:38pm |
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Mukamal Tera Naam! Nazam uljhee hui hai seeney mein
Shaer Atkey hue hain hontoon mein
Lafz kaghaz pe bethetey hi nahi
Urtey phirtey hein titliyoon ki tarah
Kab se betha hua hoon mein janam
Sada kaghaz mein likh ke naam tera
Bus tera naam hi mukammal hai
Iss se behtar bhi Nazam kya ho gi? |
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Ugly-Sana |
Group: Members Joined: 02nd Aug, 2007 Topic: 7 Post: 539 Age:
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| Posted on:8th Aug 2007, 4:44pm |
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Kissi Din! Chehrey par merey zulf ko bikhrao kissi din
Kya roz garajtey ho, baras jao kissi din
Razoon ki tarah utroo merey dil mein kissi shab
Dastak pe merey hath ki khul jao kissi din
Peroon ki tarah husn ki barish mein naha loon
Badal ki tarah jhoom ke ghar aoo kissi din
Khushbu ki tarah guzro merey dil ki gali se
Pholoon ki tarah mujh pe bikhar jaoo kissi din
Guzrien merey ghar se to ruk jayien sitarey
Is tarah meri raat ko mehkaoo kissi din!
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Ugly-Sana |
Group: Members Joined: 02nd Aug, 2007 Topic: 7 Post: 539 Age:
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| Posted on:10th Aug 2007, 11:32pm |
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To Mrs Ahmad: Nice Poetry Mrs Ahmad. Really Deep Too. |
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Ugly-Sana |
Group: Members Joined: 02nd Aug, 2007 Topic: 7 Post: 539 Age:
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| Posted on:10th Aug 2007, 11:40pm |
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To Faisee I like your nature very much. Somewhat deep. I can tell. What is yoru occupation? SInce you are everybody's favorite, why don't you share some of your ownself. May be this forum does not allow that. I don't know. Let's see what you have to say.
I think you really didn't like my poems, that is why i haven't seen anything from you.
Someone of the forum said that you don't understand poetry because you are married, Are you married?
Don't take it other wise, i was just curious.
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Bewaqoof |
Group: Members Joined: 19th Sep, 2010 Topic: 250 Post: 4284 Age:
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| Posted on:10th Aug 2007, 12:48pm |
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 re: badsoorat sana
har koi ap logo ki tarah poetry se shoq nahi rakhta aur na samajh sakta. mai ne bhi oopar ki poetry ke 3-4 line read kia aur phir chor dia. jis tarah ham Arabic mai kuch read karte hai aur samajhte kuch nahi bilkul isi tarah kuch log (like me) urdu poetry read karte hai aur kuch bhi nahi samajhte hai. mera khial hai keh Faisee bhi ose category mai ata hai.
ap ko join kiye huye abhi aik hafta bhi nahi hua lekin ap ka dawa hai keh ap faisee ki nature ko deeply janti hai...........
ap Mrs. Ahmad ki poetry par wah wah kio kar rahi hai. yeh sab log samajhte hai. ab ap return mai chah rahi hai keh Mrs. Ahmad bhi ap ki poetry par wah wah kare. lekin kuch log sirf apni suna kar wah wah lete hai doosre ki sune beghair bhag jate hai. jaisa keh khoobsoorat sahiba ne faisee ko apni poetry sunai thi lekin jab faisee ne sunai tu sune beghai bhag gai. faisee bechara kai dino tak khoobsoorat ke comments ka intezar karta raha.
yaha par bhi agar faisee ko yaqeen dilaya jai keh ose bhi sun kar wah wah kia jai ga tu shaid faisee bhi wah wah kare. waise faisee shair nahi lagta. shairi mai meri tarah copy paste karne wala lagta hai. |
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Mark |
Group: Members Joined: 10th Aug, 2007 Topic: 1 Post: 9 Age:
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| Posted on:10th Aug 2007, 2:15pm |
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 Main Shohar No. 420
Main Shohar Number 420
Khirki se bahar deikhta hoon
rang birangi larkiyon ko,
paas se guzarte deikhta hoon
unke shokh kaprey, unki tight jeans,
mujhe jawani ki yaad dilati hain
unka chalne ka andaz, unki patli kamar
mere seenay ki aag bharkati hain
wo kehte hain yeh teri umar nahi Ishq karne ki
phir kyun larkiyan muhje paas bulati hain
wo kehte hain tera waqt guzar chuka
phir kyun wo meri neendein urati hain
Main Shohar Number 420
Khirki se bahar deikhta hoon
Mere saamne wali chat par,
aik larki ko khara deikhta hoon
roz chat pe wo aati hai
apni zulfon ko lehrati hai
uski adaayen deikh kar,
kuch karne ko jee karta hai
uske gulabi honton par,
aaj marne ko jee karta hai
ankhon hi ankhon mein isharon se,
baat karne ko jee karta hai
wo kehte hain yeh kaam chor de
phir kyun khud yehi kaam karte hain
wo kehte hain Biwi ko cheat na kar
phir kyun khud cheating karte hain
Main Shohar Number 420
Khirki se bahar deikhta hoon
larkiyon se bhari college ki Bus,
jab unhain chor k jaati hai
aik larki jo paros mein rehti hai,
mere saamne aati hai
khud ko Samiya kehti hai
mujhe Uncle bulati hai
aisi pariyon ko deikh kar,
bahar jaane ko jee karta hai
khirki se neeche kood kar,
hath milane ko jee karta hai
Apni Biwi ko chor kar,
bhaag jaane ko jee karta hai
Wo kehte hain uska Bhai tandrust hai bohat
phir bhi maar khane ko jee karta hai
wo kehte hain ab kuch hath nahin aaye ga
phir bhi kuch paane ko jee karta hai
Main Shohar Number 420
Khirki se bahar deikhta hoon... |
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josh |
Group: Members Joined: 30th Jul, 2007 Topic: 47 Post: 2296 Age:
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| Posted on:10th Aug 2007, 4:38pm |
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Poetry! Sab nay bohat achi poetry likhi hai lekin sab say ziada achi muje mrs ahmed ki poetry lagi hai, Very nice Mrs.Ahmed, apki poetry apkay dil ki awaz lag rahi hai, bohat hi romantic and full of love for your beloved. khoobsurat & sana ap dono ki poetry bi bohat hi nice hai, ugly_sana apki last poetry "Kisi Din!" aisa lag raha ha jaisey kisi ko daant parr rahi hai
Chehrey par merey zulf ko bikhrao kissi din
Kya roz garajtey ho, baras jao kissi din
dont take it seriously , mazak kar raha hon, everything is very nice.
mr. mark your poetry titile should be BADMASH SHOHAR
ab itni tareefain ki hain to ap sab ko meri poetry bi parhna paray gi.
Wo Dil hi kia jo tayray milnay ki dua na karay.
Main tujh ko bhol ker zinda rahon khuda na karay.
Rahey sath tayra piyar zindagi ban ker .
Yeh or baat ha k mayri zindagi wafa na karay.
Yeh theek ha merta nahi koe judai main .
Khuda mager kisi ko kisi say juda na karay. |
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Ugly-Sana |
Group: Members Joined: 02nd Aug, 2007 Topic: 7 Post: 539 Age:
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| Posted on:13th Aug 2007, 9:55am |
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To Bewaqoof: Kissi ko janeney ke liye kabhie to sadiyaan bhi kafi nahi hotien
Haan kissi ka shaid kuchh pal ka sath bhi ashna kar jata hai.
For your information, I have not declared that i can very well understand Faisee's nature. I 've just said what i felt. And as i was reading his postings, i could just tell how intelligent he really is. The topics he creates are very thought provoking, he replies in a really intense way. He just has a different style of creative writing skills and interesting conversational points than anybody else on the forum.
Even though it has been just a week for me since i've joinded this forum, but i have been reading the postings on this site from past couple of months and i've always liked what Faisee has recommended and have appreciated his sense of intelligence. That is all.
Even though you are bewaqoof, i hope this time you understood what i meant. |
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Ugly-Sana |
Group: Members Joined: 02nd Aug, 2007 Topic: 7 Post: 539 Age:
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| Posted on:13th Aug 2007, 10:50am |
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To Mark: Hey Mark that was really creative. It was very enjoyable. Very well presented. I wish i could read more of it, it was making me laugh hard.
Josh: Your poetry was nice too, i've heard first couple of lines before too, but your's was complete i guess. And by the way, my poetry (Kissi Din),, may be sounded like a (Daant) to you, but i feel it was more like a request to the person you love so much, to spend more time with you, to express more of their love for you. Well everyone has their own opinion.
But thanks, for the response. |
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noorbaba |
Group: Members Joined: 25th Jul, 2007 Topic: 4 Post: 33 Age:
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| Posted on:14th Aug 2007, 4:14pm |
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re: mark
LOLZ!!!!
hy to behuda si nazam lakin likhi ahkeer hi hai kisi ne :D hahahah |
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faisee |
Group: Active Members Joined: 13th Feb, 2007 Topic: 79 Post: 776 Age:
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| Posted on:14th Aug 2007, 5:18pm |
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Re: cute_sana sana: first of all I am really sorry for the belated reply. Actually I dint open this post in last some days so I missed your comments alongwith the comments by bewaqoof. Actually this post was getting lengthy and I chose to open selected posts due to lack of time. Sorry again.
secondly, thanks alot for expressing such precious views for me. shaid main is qabil nahin jitna intelligent and intellectual aap nai mujhay samjha. aur waqai kisi ko jannay kai liye waqt ki qaid nahin hotee. jaisay from your posts too, I have got whole idea of your personality. (now dont ask, its secret :) )
baqi jo batain aap nai poochi hain, I dont have any objection in sharing with you, but may be moderators and other members dont like it and may be bewaqoof bhai, khoobsorat and others would say that I am doing something wrong by telling about me personal and khudanakhasta there is something fishy going on. :) bas yun samjhain kai aap ka yeh bhai har kisi ko khush dekhna chahta hai aur kisi ka dil dukhana nahin chahta.
and nooooooo, i m not married yet. aur mujjhay poetry samajh bhi atee hai aur pasand bhi hai. but it takes time which usually I dont have. haan achi poetry parhta bhi hoon aur enjoy bhi karta hoon.
aap ki likhee hue all poems were really good. third one I already have read and its by parveen shakir (If i am not wrong). pehli 2 bhi buhut achee hain. I liked them.
khoobsoorat aur Mrs Ahmed wrote beautiful expression of love too. these are some of my opinions which are precised due to lack of time and space.
raha bewaqoof bhai ka sawal, tu un ka character and role mujhay bakhobi pata ahi, woh meri tareef bhi kartay hain, mujh per tanqeed bhi kartay hain, aur jab main kuch din a na sakoon tu mujh sai udaas bhi hotay hain. aur jab koi meray baray main comments deta hai tu us per naik khayalat ka izhar bhi kartay hain.
Bewaqoof sahib: mujhay aap ki mujh sai hamdardi ka poora ehsas hai, laikin mujhay khushi ho gi kai aap apnay opinion zaroor dain laikin not on behalf of me.
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Bewaqoof |
Group: Members Joined: 19th Sep, 2010 Topic: 250 Post: 4284 Age:
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| Posted on:14th Aug 2007, 11:57pm |
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masla tu phool ka hai faisee: ap ka comments sana ke lia man tura haji bagoyem tu mera haji bago wali bat hai. mere bare mai tu ap ne ja kahna tha kah dia ab mazeed kia sunna chahte ho.
bhai faisee ap ne perveen shakir ka zikir kia. perveen shakir ka sirf aik hi sher mujhe yad hai. pata nahi kaha parha tha shaid rikshaw aur bus ke peeche parha hoga jaisa ke khoobsoorat sahiba mere bare mai samajhti hai. bahar hal sher yeh hai.
woh tu khooshbo hai, hawao mai bikhar jai ga
masla tu phool ka hai, phool kidhar jai ga.
kia tum forum ke members ko zahan mai rakh kar bata sakte ho keh in members mai phool kon hai aur khooshboo kaun?
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faisee |
Group: Active Members Joined: 13th Feb, 2007 Topic: 79 Post: 776 Age:
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| Posted on:15th Aug 2007, 1:16am |
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Re: Bewaqoof bhai, aap ki bhi writing skills ko appreciate karta hoon main, kafi mature aur knowledgebale lagtay hain aap with some command on literature too. waisay is sentence ko samajh nahin saka main"mere bare mai tu ap ne ja kahna tha kah dia ab mazeed kia sunna chahte ho."zara wazahat farmaye.
aur forum kai members kai baray main aap jo ugalwana chahaty hain woh tu mujhay nahin pata, laikin shayed "phool" yeh forum hai, aur "khooshboo" aap sab ko pata hi hai. (waisay "fool" ka bhi sab ko pata hai. kidding)
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Ugly-Sana |
Group: Members Joined: 02nd Aug, 2007 Topic: 7 Post: 539 Age:
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| Posted on:15th Aug 2007, 10:05am |
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To Faisee: Faisee bhai koi baat nahi agar app ne reply late post kiya hai, but i'm happy at least you did. Thank you so much for such cute names and addressing me with so much respect. It feels great to get admiration from the person you admire yourself.
Buhat Buhat shukriya ke app ko meri poetry achhi lagi hai, I'm not too sure about poets, i think to remember the names of poets is the only boring part of reading and understanding the poetry. That is why i just read and understand poetry and don't even bother about poets. But if someone does, that is really very smart.
To waqt ki koi bandish nahi hoti kissi ko janeney ke liye? To app bhi meri personality ko samajh chukey hain. Woww. Interesting. Mein app se puchhna to chahti thi lekin app ne keh diya ke (That's secret). so I'll keep it. At least i know that you understood me.
Faisee bhai i really wanted to know, what your occupation was at least. And other things that i have asked you in my pervious post. There wasn't anything too personal. Anyway, mein en mederators aur dusrey members se puchha hai ke agar unhien koi aitraaz hai. Agar unhien koi aitraaz hua to app apni profile ke zariye hi humien kuchh bata den. (Besides: Occupation: Keerey nikalna). Waisey mujhey nahi lagta ke app keerey nikaltey hein, I find you very interesting and enjoyable and a person with a really nice nature.
Moderators, Khoobsurat, and Bewaqoof: Since, everybody on this forum like Faisee, Kya app ko koi aitraaz hai agar Faisee bhai humien apney barey mein kuchh bataien. Nothing personal, but just little bit about his occupation and personality. Nothing fishy is going on, so don't take it otherwise. |
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Ugly-Sana |
Group: Members Joined: 02nd Aug, 2007 Topic: 7 Post: 539 Age:
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| Posted on:15th Aug 2007, 10:10am |
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To Faisee: Jaisey ke Bewaqoof ne app ko eik shair likha hai, uss ke jawab mein app en unhien yeh to bata diya hai, ke Phool yeh forum hai, Lekin yeh clear nahi tha ke Khushboo kon hai, app ne likha hai ke sab ko pata hi hai? Mujhey nahi pata can you tell us?
And by the way, we all know who the FOOL is. Lolll... |
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faisee |
Group: Active Members Joined: 13th Feb, 2007 Topic: 79 Post: 776 Age:
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| Posted on:15th Aug 2007, 3:46pm |
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Re: cute_sana first of all thanks for admiring and I will always call by cute not ugly, because my sister can't be ugly, isn't? once I asked Kali Zuban too change her nick but she din't, and I couldnt modified it properly too, but I can call you as cute_sana, I am happy you liked it.
Baqi rahee baat telling you about myself. tu I would say kai shaid faisee aik aisa afsana hai jo shayed kisi ki samajh main na asakay, yeh "touch-me-not" jaisa aik phool hai kai agar aap nai is ko janna chaha (touch karna chaha) tu shayed yeh simatt kar wapis apnay leaves main band ho jaye. faisee is a character, which is performed by someone. baqi I hope moderators will not allow, to help me. :D
baqi Bewaqoof kia poochna chah rahay thay, I dont know exactly, I would request kai woh khud bataen ya hint dain, aur jo main nai kaha us sai ziada main kuch nahin keh sakta.
log zalim hain,
har baat ka ta'ana dain gai
best.
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Ugly-Sana |
Group: Members Joined: 02nd Aug, 2007 Topic: 7 Post: 539 Age:
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| Posted on:15th Aug 2007, 4:46pm |
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To Faisee: Thank you so much for that new name, and of course you can always call me with that name. I choose my nickname to be (Ugly-Sana), just to be little stupid i guess. But now as you said, i was even tryign to change the nickname, but i couldn't, anyway i also updated me profile.
It felt so nice, when you said that your sister can't be ugly. Thanks. Aur App ney apney taruuf mein phir eik deep si baat keh di, aur kuchh nahi bataya. I will see what moderators say. I will look forward to know you even more.
Nice to talk to you. Take care, |
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